ನಾ ಕವಿ-14

Thought let me take break from long poems and start writing short ones...
I know it may not be upto expectation, but somewhere I should start..
so from here it is...

ನೀ ಬಂದೆ, ನನ್ನ ಮನದ ತುಂಬ ನಿನ್ನ ಆಸೆಯ ತಂದೆ
ಆಸೆಯ ಸವಿಯುತ, ಆಸೆಯ ತಂದ ನಿನನ್ನೆ ಮರೆತೆ
ಮರೆತ ತಪ್ಪಿಗೆ, ಮರೆಯಲ್ಲಿ ಮೂಡಿದ ಈ ಕವಿತೆಯ ತಂದೆ


From: anoop.chandrachar
Sent: Wednesday, April 22, 2009 1:51 PM
To: harsha.mp@thoughtfocus.com
Subject: RE: Naa kavi-14


Not Good!!!

Poem aenu helta ella… no feeling at all……

Aase means what from the poem point of view???

From: Shivalingaiah, Kiran
Sent: Wednesday, April 22, 2009 2:16 PM
To: harsha
Subject: RE: Naa kavi-14


Hehehe… gud one J